After school
Soitu on 10/8/2019 2:52:55 PM
Episode last modified by Soitu on 10/8/2019 2:52:55 PM
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This is a great series, and a very clever idea. Is this something you would like others to contribute to, or is this a story you would like to create yourself?
Thank you, I am glad you like it. I have to say I never considered someone would want to contribute to this story. I always thought of it as something I would write alone, and I planned a lot of things I want to do with it that I don't think would work if I had to adapt to what other people write. You can still make another branch and I might add to it if I have some ideas, but I think I'll keep making my own story at the same time.
I did have a sense that this story was moving in a more deliberate direction than many interactive stories. I may contribute a chapter or two, but feel no obligation to add to it. Very interested to see what you have planned!
I second that this is a great story. The only thing I wish was different was that mental changes were not explicitly disallowed in one of the first original wishes. I'm tempted to circumuent it by writing an episode where Sarah makes some changes to Jon's brain - I guess it's something that's physical. It wouldn't overwrite who Jon is, but might give him some new thoughts or feelings - which works for me cause I'm not a fan of identity death anyway.
I love the slow burn, and how Jon, Karyn, and Sarah are behaving realistically for the ridiculous situation they're in. A lot of other branches might just jump into the changes without stopping to think through the ramifications of each event, or just let Jon meekly submit without fighting back like a normal person. Keep up the great work
Thank you. I'm trying to make the characters more realistic than in most other branches, the slow burn is more a consequence of that than something I planned. For the mind change, it's mostly a personal preference. It's not something I enjoy very much and I couldn't justifie the characters not using it unless it was explicitly forbidden. But as I said before, if you still want to add your own chapters, you're more than welcome to do so.