Jon's game: First quest

Soitu on 9/27/2021 8:30:20 AM
Episode last modified by Soitu on 9/30/2021 7:18:06 AM

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*Quests are optional secondary objectives that you can do for a reward. You can refuse almost any quest without consequence, but there might be some for not doing a quest already accepted. Most quests are generated and evolve depending of your actions, so don't worry if you see a quest change or disappear after some time has passed or after you do something..* Emily couldn't help but smile after hearing this despite her worries. She would have been skeptical in any other game, but this game was magic, so she didn't doubt it would be great. "I just hope the rewards are not turning me even more into a girl." She said to herself. *The quests are not normally indicated by the game, so you'll have to interact with the world around you to discover them. Some might even be created during your conversation with someone. However, for this tutorial, we'll show the location of your first quest on the map.* Karyn looked at her map where a yellow dot had appeared. "It looks like it's in the marketplace where we were a bit earlier." Emily nodded and began to walk toward their next objective, Karyn leading her with the map. The marketplace was even more crowded than before. "How are we going to find the quest in all this?" Emily asked while looking around. "It looks like it's moving around a bit but it's pretty close to you, somewhere to your right." Emily looked where Karyn had pointed. Nothing seemed out of the ordinary at first, but a woman quickly drew his attention. She was looking around as if searching for something and looked panicked. Emily looked back at Karyn but she just shrugged. "Try to talk to her. She's in the right place at least." Emily nodded and walked to the woman. "Excuse me. I saw you looking around, do you need help?" The woman looked at Emily in surprise. "You..." She hesitated a moment before deciding she had nothing to lose. "I can't find my daughter. She disappeared while I was shopping for food. Can you help me find her?" Suddenly, the world paused once more. "Karyn. Are you making me say something again?" Emily asked. "No. The game gave me the quest, and I have to choose whether or not I accept it." Emily raised an eyebrow in interest. "Does it say what the reward will be?" "No, there's only question marks there." Emily sighed. "I hope it's not going to change me more." "So... Do I still accept it?" Karyn asked. "Yeah, we'll be here forever if we don't take risks." As suddenly as it stopped, the world began moving again and Emily was forced to say. "Sure, I'll help you." "Thank you!" The woman said. "You search to the north, I'll search to the south and we return here in 10 minutes, alright?" "Wait!" Emily called the woman who was already walking away. "What does your daughter look like?" "Oh... Sorry. Her name is Lyla. She's seven years old, with brown hair styled in pigtails. She's wearing a blue dress, and she always carries a doll with her." She said in a hurry then began walking away again. "I'll see you in 10 minutes." The north of the marketplace was thankfully less crowded than the south. The stalls here didn't sell food, but rather things like tableware, clothes or jewellery, things people didn't need to buy too often. So there was a lot of space for Emily and Karyn to search for the girl. However, it wasn't as simple as they thought it'd be. "God! Where is she?" Emily shouted in frustration. It had already been more than 5 minutes but there was no sign of her, no matter where they looked. "This marketplace isn't that big!" "Maybe she's on the other side, and her mother found her?" Karyn proposed. "I don't think so. It might be magic, but I don't think the game would make a quest that made us search for something that's not there. We must be missing something..." "I don't know, J... Emily. I think we've looked everywhere, unless she's hiding inside a stall." Emily sighed. "We might as well try." She headed for a nearby stall where a man was selling fabric. "Excuse me, have you seen a little girl alone around here?" "A little girl in a blue dress?" The man asked. Emily made a shocked expression. She didn't expect this to work so well. "Yes! I'm searching for her. Do you know where she is?" The man stroked his beard. "I think I saw her go down that alley around 10 minutes ago." He pointed at a nearby alleyway. "I found it odd because it's a dead end and I've never seen..." "Thank you!" Emily interrupted him. "I'm sorry but I have to go!" She began running toward the alley. "Well... Alright..." The man said as he watched her go.

Go after the girl (12)


I also highly enjoy this thread. Thank you for the hard work! I may be wrong, but I think there may be one inconsistency with wishes introduced in "Jon wishes to be a video game protagonist" episode: Jon made a wish "I wish my life would become more like the life of a protagonist from a video game I would enjoy!". If the game does not consider Emily to be the same person as Jon, then this wish might not have been granted. After all, Jon referred to his life in the wish. Of course you may have plans to explain that down the road. I have some suspicions, as it seems other wishes: about not modifying mind, or having way out, also have not worked. And even if not, and this is inconsistency, I believe that it does not impact the current story in any considerable way. Thanks!


White_Raven

9/27/2021 12:18:33 PM

I love your story, please continue! An advice: I would like to see Karyn a little more evil and devious vs Jon/Emily. She has a great power and I would like she use it.


LadyViolence

9/27/2021 11:22:34 AM

Thank you. As for Karyn, I'm not sure where this will go. I tend to let the characters write themselves, so I don't know in advance how they will turn out from here, but I do intend to have her abuse her power at some point, even if she might regret it later.


Soitu

9/27/2021 12:14:51 PM

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoy it. For what you mentionned, it's not an inconsistancy, I don't know if I will do something with it in the future so... Maybe spoiler ahead? It's nothing major anyway. Jon and Emily are the same person, but for the game, Emily is the main character of the game and it can't treat her like a player, but it needs to have a template for what Jon as a player would like, and so, they are treated like 2 different persons. (That can change later if I have a better idea, but that's how I see it right now)


Soitu

9/27/2021 12:36:49 PM

More English help! "after some time passed or after you did something." should read "after some time has passed or after you do something." "was still even more crowded" should be either "was even more crowded" or "was still more crowded", though the second one is better used as a comparison to some thing that comes next in the sentence. That is something like "was still more crowded than earlier", but this structure doesn't really fit in with the rest of the sentence. "don't take any risk." while what's there isn't actually wrong, it would be more usual to say "risks" here. Explaining why is hard and I'm not sure how to do it. "go in this alley" should probably be phrased as "go down that alley"


bigbustgazer

9/30/2021 1:43:38 AM

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