Zoe has a laugh

Marazh-no on 3/1/2022 3:18:01 AM
Episode last modified by Marazh-no on 3/1/2022 3:18:16 AM

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(Krystren- I'll try but on a computer they look like pretty small paragraphs to me. Anyway, I'll keep it in mind) "I wish I know what Jon is up to." A flash of a magic stone later and Zoe was on the floor laughing. This was just too good. Composing herself she quickly got off the floor. Aware of all the strange looks she was getting. One quick wish later and anyones' memory of the incident was erased. Still, Zoe couldn't help but skip to her first class. May the circus continue!

Jon awakens, consequences 1 (1)


I'll follow up to Krystren's comment with a gentle nudge: a good, readable paragraph is usually 3-5 sentences long. Sometimes your story will call for shorter paragraphs or longer paragraphs, and that's okay based on your judgement. Paragraphs with dialog will tend to be shorter in general. But if you have a 6-sentence paragraph, it's a good idea to look back and see if there's a logical place to split it up. Sometimes there won't be, and that's okay. But usually there's a thought that *can* be connected to the previous sentence, but doesn't *have to* be. Like, for example, the sentence "sometimes there won't be, and that's okay." :)


Ms. Cork

3/1/2022 9:50:39 PM

And if I'm already piggy-backing on Krystren's comments, I may as well also repeat: you're making some great contributions, and I'm looking forward to seeing your next chapters!


Ms. Cork

3/1/2022 9:52:11 PM

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