I hope you don't mind
Maddie on 3/30/2017 7:29:02 PM
Episode last modified by Maddie on 3/30/2017 7:29:02 PM
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Hope you don't mind but I added my own version of your chapter as I felt that it was a little too fast and that Karyn was rather aggressive in your chapter. Usually the events that happen in girl world are quite subtle and the main characters don't seem to find anything wrong with them.
Anyway I kept the bit about the drink spilling as I quite liked that idea and just changed it slightly.
Again I hope you don't mind.
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