The Wishing Well: Too Far

Anonymous51 on 5/18/2022 10:09:15 PM
Episode last modified by Anonymous51 on 5/18/2022 10:09:15 PM

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Jon watched the stone glow, then blinked. Maybe he took that wish too far. Taking away Cecil's voice was one thing, but _that_. Where had that even come from? Jon didn't normally think up weirdly bizarre and grotesque ways to get back at people. Sure, Cecil had motivated Karyn to knock him out with that shovel, but he never told her to _kill_ him. And ultimately, it was Karyn herself who had decided to use the shovel. She could have just punched him instead. And yeah, it was clear that Cecil was a pervert. But given his initial wish to become a young man (presumably Cecil was way older, if he had wished for that), was it any wonder that he would want to reacquire the sexual experiences of his youth? Maybe even do stuff that he hadn't the first time around? Did Cecil go too far? Perhaps. But Jon's punishment on the man didn't seem to fit the crime. If anything, it came off looking like _Jon_ was the horrible one. What he did to that guy ... frankly, it was unforgivable. Still shaking at the punishment he had inflicted upon Cecil, Jon made another wish. He didn't know what the man had done to Karyn and her mother, specifically, but he knew that it was probably nothing good, so he made a wish to make them no longer affected by Cecil's power over them. Sure, he had taken away Cecil's voice, but that would only mean that he couldn't continue to adjust women's minds with his power to make them unable to "say no" to him, and have them justify to themselves why they weren't rejecting him. This way, everything that happened with Cecil would still have happened, but all the women he had used his power on would "come to their senses" and realize that whatever they had done with Cecil was out-of-character for them and wouldn't do it again. So with that wish, among other things, Karyn no longer thought she was a slut or wanted to have a three-way with her mother; Alison (Karyn's mother) no longer desired to watch her daughter have sex or get wasted drunk; Linda Masters no longer felt obligated to meet Cecil at the park again, or have the desire to wear tight clothing, or have the desire to have a bigger butt (though the wish she made to _have_ a bigger butt was still in effect); the innkeeper woman at the front desk no longer minded her own business about what Cecil had been up to, bringing all these women to her motel; and all those women he brought there? Yeah, they returned to normal, as well. ====== Back at the motel room, Karyn wondered if she should tell her mother about what's been going on, either with the wishing stone, the wishing well, or both.

The secondary reason for the part I wrote was to activate Karyn’s mom as a new active character for story development. I didn’t just close a door, I opened a new one. Also it returns Karyn into active play. A story is like a game of chess. I just developed 2 pieces and put them into active play, while removing the less valuable piece from active play that was getting in everyone’s way. Please don’t squander the new opportunities that opens. The next logical progression should have been to spill the beans about the wishes to Karyn’s mom, not obsess over the discardrd piece.

Thisisnota Realname

5/22/2022 9:49:29 PM

The dude literally took a girl off the street, and had her assault her friend, that is violence first of all. And yes the shovel was her only means to knock him out. She’s a teenaged girl. She can’t knock out a guy by punching him. Who do you think she is, Chun Li? And what does he do with his persuasion power? He forces her to have an incestuous threesome with himself and her own mother. That’s pretty fucked up. That proves he doesn’t give a shit about other people. Can you imagine being forced to have sex with one of YOUR parents? You think Jon should give him the benefit of the doubt after that? To just say “I’ll trust him to be alone in a room with my best friend and her mom, now that he can no longer speak I’m sure he’ll live and let live ”? No sir it would have been completely reasonable for Jon to have killed him right there, Cecil is lucky he only got maimed.

Thisisnota Realname

5/23/2022 8:42:42 AM

I'm just trying to point out that the way Jon dealt with the situation is completely out of character for him. Is he now going to make more wishes like that, to other people, some of which have done worse, like actually committing murder? If you want to go down that road, I'm not going to stop you (well, actually I can't, since I have no control over other people's episodes), but don't expect me to just go along with it, unless there's a good explanation for why Jon is suddenly acting that way.

Anonymous51

5/23/2022 9:39:38 AM

A strange condemnation of the actions I wrote into the story and defense of Cecil. First of all, though cruel and unusual, the punishment was in fact fit to the situation- it deprived Cecil of sexual function as consequence for sexually assaulting Karyn and her mom, and the rest was to guarantee he wouldn’t be a physical threat. Just depriving him of his voice doesn’t get them out of danger. What if having lost the ability to control their minds, he had changed his plan to leaving no witnesses? You think that wasn’t likely considering he had already used violence? He could have killed Karyn and her mom right there, he could have pulled out a gun and shot them, or stabbed them, or killed them barehanded, you want to bet on a teenaged girl and a middle aged woman against a young man in desperation? Also what if he went back to the well and made a wish on paper, dropping it into the well along with a coin? Taking his arms seems to me the bare minimum to stop him. And his plans were clearly beyond merely recapturing his youth and sexual experiences thereof, because he already had his youth back as well as an absurd capability he never had as a young man which already let him do that, yet that wasn’t enough for him, since he attacked Jon and Karyn to stop them from filling in the well for no other possible reason but that he was going to wish for still more. What possible reason could he have for needing that well to still be there? Is Cecil your self insertion into the story, a standin for yourself and therefore you see an attack on him as an attack on you? Was he supposed to be your Mary Sue?

Thisisnota Realname

5/22/2022 9:13:30 PM

As to your first comment - What? Where did you get that Cecil is a violent person? A pervert, sure. Someone without morals, okay. But he never tried to harm or kill anyone. Yes, he told Karyn to knock Jon out, but he never told her HOW. That was left up to her. Mutilating someone so grotesquely for doing what Cecil did? Maybe YOU'RE the one who's being inserted into the story, wanting to get revenge through words on the person who did something like that to YOU. Jon doesn't have a sick mind like that. At least not in any of the other countless stories that I've either written or read on the site. And dropping notes into a well? I'm pretty sure that's not how wishing wells work, or how they're supposed to. As to your second comment - Who says that you can't still have Karyn telling her mother about the wishes? That is literally what the last part of this episode is about, whether or not she should tell her.

Anonymous51

5/22/2022 10:49:46 PM